Formal writing good copy.

In the year 2012 mobile phones are a massive part of our society. They are used by a huge variety of outlets.. such as businesses or families. However.. some people would argue that mobile phones aren’t what they’re cracked up to be- in fact they apparently control peoples lives. This formal writing assignment is to negate against said statement.. and convince you to believe that mobile phones do not control people’s lives. The factors I believe play a large part in my arguments are as follows: Mobile phones are only addicting to people who are weak against addiction Mobile phones are only a means of communication.. nothing else Mobile phones are a piece of plastic. The statement of “Mobile phones control people’s lives” leads me to believe that it is a metaphor.. meaning that mobile phones are addicting. Mobile phones are not very addictive whatsoever. I’d happily say that over 90% of my age group is not addicted to mobile phones. The small portion of people I do know that are “Addicted” to mobile phones check them occasionally for no reason. I would hardly count that as an addiction though.. seeing as the definition of addiction is as follows: “Mentally and physically dependent on a particular substance.. unable to stop taking it without incurring adverse effects.” This means that I know absolutely no-one who is addicted to mobile phones. Take that.. precarious statement! This statement that I am arguing against also leads me to believe that mobile phones are more than just a means of communication. They aren’t. Plain and simple. Mobile phones are simply something you talk to people with. It is ridiculous to assume that they can control ones life. It is absolutely ridiculous to believe that a means of communication can alter.. or decide for you the life choices you make. I don’t know whoever created this statement.. but they are most likely very sheltered.. and wear tin foil helmets to protect their brains from the government/alien’s rays of doom. This statement that I have argued against finally leads me to believe that the creator of this topic thinks that mobile phones have greater power than just to send messages.. and telecommunication. Mobile phones are mainly maid out of plastic.. thus they are not sentient.. and are incapable of having the (As the definition of “Control” instates) “The power to influence or direct people’s behavior or the course of events.” This statement makes mobile phones sound like heroin. Demonizing mobile phones to this stage will get no-one far. It’s best just to keep up with the times.. and accept the technology as it comes. Throughout my argument I have stated that mobile phones aren’t at all addicting.. that mobile phones are just a means of communication.. nothing more.. nothing less.. and finally that mobile phones are just a piece of plastic. In the end I hope that I have persuaded you to believe that mobile phones do not control people’s lives. Thanks- Tom Burgess 495 words.

Winning Edge. (PE ASSIGNMENT)

I do not have a comma so ".." will be my comma for this.

This is my guide on how to get the winning edge on happiness.. and why it is important.

First I would like to describe what my winning edge is. My winning edge is to be overall happy in life. I think this is a huge advantage.. because when you have a negative attitude life can be a lot harder.

The benefit of having this winning edge is almost obvious. When you have this winning edge.. you can go through your day to day life being a happy person. Not only is this just a great thing to be in life.. but it can also prevent mental disorders such as depression.. insomnia.. and eating disorders. Being happy isn't just a state of emotion. It is a lifestyle almost. When you are happy in life.. people notice. Though not much may be said about how you are a happy person.. people will notice. Being a happy person is largely viewed in society as a very good thing. To face the facts.. depression is an ever expanding disorder.. and has a huge impact on New Zealand. This makes being a happy person even more largely viewed as being a great thing. Besides being seen as a better person.. another stand out thing about being a happy person is the large chance that an employer will hire a happy person over a sad one. This can make getting a job a LOT easier.

A few things that can provide this winning edge include doing the following things
Getting exercise. Not only does this make you feel better about yourself.. this will also subconsciously make you less prone to mental disorders. This will help you gain the winning edge.
Eating healthily. Eating healthily will build on to what getting exercise does. This will just make you feel good about yourself in general.. because in our modern day.. not many eat healthily.. and this will make you unique in a good way.
Listening to music you enjoy. Listening to music has been shown to improve your mood from day one. Music has had a large impact on a countless amount of people.. and it can be exactly the same for you.

Steps required to making this winning edge effective are listed above. All you have to do is set goals for yourself. With the combination of the right exercise.. food and music you can make yourself a lot more happy than you are now. Without goals.. you may attempt to have this winning edge.. but most people will fall short.. be too lazy to continue.. or forget about it completely. That is why you need goals. With goals you have motivation to not give up.. and to plow through the tough times. If you were to plan out how many times you're supposed to go for a exercise per week.. that is all fine and dandy.. I can assure you that you will loose motivation fast. I recommend you do your exercise with a friend.. so that you solely have motivation not to disappoint said friend. With out a goal.. you have next to no motivation. I can't stress this enough.

The effect is not limited to have an effect on you. It also effects your family.. your friends.. class mates.. it can even have an effect on your whole life. People do this thing I'd like to call "Absorbing emotions." When someone is around a sad person long enough.. they end up being sad as well. This happens with the flip side. Of course people's moods fluctuate.. but being a happy person in general will help people absorb your happiness. Being a happy person in general can.. and most likely will help you get far in life.

Thanks for reading this
-Tom

Quest for Fire: Film Response

Quest For Fire Film Response The film "Quest For Fire" directed by J-J Annaud is about a small band of Neanderthals who are in search of fire to continue the lives of their tribe members. Throughout their journey they come across numerous obstacles.. such as a tribe of cannibals.. or a large group of mammoths. Annaud used various film techniques through out the movie such as close up shots.. special effects and music to make it seem more dramatic.. and give a good feel for the film. Three features of which I found really stood out were Music.. noise and high and low angle shots. I'll now go into detail on each. Jean-Jaques Annaud uses several different types of music to help put across themes such as despair.. or bravery. An example of this would be when the leader of the group of Neanderthals is discovering how to make fire. In this scene Annaud uses a crescendo to emphasize his enlightenment. Another example of this.. is at the very beginning of the film when the camera is panning over the baron landscape.. and before you even know what is going on.. you can tell just by the music the tone in which the film is set. The second film technique I'd like to go into is the noise of which Annaud used in the film to give the movie a bigger sense of what was happening. In the first scene of the film the cavemen end up getting chased out of their home.. and fall into a run for their lives. The wolves were in hot pursuit of the cavemen. What Annaud uses in this scene to add intensity is marvelous. Annaud adds in the snarling of wolves.. and a combination of animalistic noises. This.. in my opinion.. works brilliantly. It gives the film a really big feel for survival.. which is the movie's biggest theme. The third.. and final technique I'd like to go into is the low and high angle shots. This technique is very effective in this movie.. as it shows a greater meaning to the film. In a scene the group of Neanderthals are confronted by a large group of mammoths. The camera is looking down on the Neanderthals.. making them look small.. and insignificant. The camera is looking up on the Mammoths.. making them look almighty and powerful. I feel that this technique shows that although this is just a film.. it's not just about half brain-dead cavemen running around looking for some fire.. but it has a more philosophical meaning. The Quest for Fire by J-J Annaud uses a number of film techniques very well.. giving the movie a great feel. This not only makes the film infinitely better.. but it won JJ some awards too. -Tom

Arawata Bill (Creative writing)

Mostly all that I can usually see is the color grey yet the mountains and all their streams.. rivers and rocks still stun me with their beauty. The rocks glisten with water from the river. The river is complimented by the rocks.. which make it look more raging than it actually is. One thing that is better than all the rest is gold. I know it's here too. The river's roar is so loud that my voice is muffled. It doesn’t matter anyway. I'm all alone up here. Small beams of light leak through the top of the tarp.. which was meant to keep some rain out. It's coming to it's end soon. It has practically no effect now. My mind starts to awaken. "Another day." It thinks. Another day of the search for gold. Another day looking for my next pay. Another day of the hunt. When I roll over out of bed.. I try to think of where the gold is most likely going to be.. but this boggles me. My body is aching. My stomach isn't very appeased. I would eat.. but I wouldn't want to waste the very minimal amount of what you may call food up. The things that I could eat are old corned beef and rock-hard biscuits. Appetizing. On my feet.. I can definitely feel the effects of yesterdays struggle up the mountain. I stumble over to the exit of my temporary home. On the way.. negative thoughts strike my mind. This will probably be one of my last trips. My time is nearly up. I decide that positive thoughts are a lot better. I’ll make it home with hundreds of dollars of gold. I wonder how much gold I’d have by now if I were 10 years younger. My mind becomes a war zone. I scan the environment. There are trees sprinkled around the landscape as if they were on of a child’s cake. When you look around and past nature’s beauty.. it’s actually quite an ominous thing. The clouds roll overtop of the area.. while the river is pulling then smashing anything it can touch. Suck you in so that it can destroy you. All it takes is just one misplaced foot for me to never return home. I’d better be careful. With all my gear ready.. I think of what I may get today. I may get to be rich. I may just waste more time of my life. I step off from my perch on a rock.. which is jutting out of the ground like a sinking ship. I set off on my journey. This was one of the most memorable days of my life. Why am I living it again? Why is it that it’s all that I can think of right now? Maybe it’s just not right how I’m dying. Should I be out there right now? Instead of dreaming.. should I be putting up a fight? Or has It all left me? If I did fight this.. I’d only die a week or so later. I try to get into a comfortable position. My body starts going numb. I think of what I’ve done throughout my life. Who I am. All my accomplishments and failures. I don’t know if I’m supposed to go out like this.. but it feels right. I close my eyes.. and start to drift off. This is the end. A summary of what this describes is: It pretty much shows that Arawata Bill was a curious man. Also.. he was very confident that he would find gold and live off of it.. even though he knew that gold is hard to come by. Thanks - Tom

Macbeth Essay Draft

In William Shakespeare's "Macbeth" a event of which I consider to be a major turning point was when Macbeth meets the three witches. I thought this was a major turning point because without these three witches.. Macbeth wouldn't have gone insane from his "Vaulting Ambition"

A reason why this is such a major turning point is because the witches predict that not only will Macbeth assume the role of Thane of Cawdor.. but he will become king too! This is a turning point in more ways than one. Because this starts his previously stated "Vaulting ambition." Without Macbeth’s ambition.. he wouldn’t have killed Duncan.. or at least he would have prolonged his demise.

“All hail Macbeth.. thane of Glamis!
All hail Macbeth.. thane of Cawdor!
All hail Macbeth.. king of Scotland!”

This is evidence of the turning point.
This turning point also displays a lot of qualities of Macbeth.. helping the audience learn a bit about Macbeth and Banquo. Macbeth’s childish ways are heavily displayed throughout the play by showing his lust for power. He wants what he shouldn’t be able to have. Another demonstration of his childish ways is how much Macbeth hates losing. He goes to great extents to prove to lady Macbeth that he is a man.. instead of a “mouse.” Another point of this is he tries so hard to be king.. and kills anyone who is in his way. So much so that he would kill his best friend. I

n my opinion.. all of Macbeths negative features are amplified after the scene with the witches’ prediction. Shakespeare demonstrates that words can go a long way.. and that a small group can change a nation.

In the play of Macbeth.. there are many turning points. One of the major ones I chose to examine the turning point when the witches told Macbeth his future. Essentially this started Macbeth’s insanity.. and started his kingdom ship.. and malevolent ways.

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-Tom

Quest for fire: Good Copy. Readers Response

The book "Quest For Fire" by R.N. Rosy is about three neanderthals searching the earth for fire.. for their clan. This is intriguing.. because in the modern day fire dosen't play such a large roll in our lives. We can go any day without seeing any fire whatsoever and not care. This is so different for them. This also shows the courage of the cavemen and the hardships they went through.In this particular chapter the three men.. Nam.. Gam.. and their leader Naoh seek a safe haven for the night. They stumble upon a cave and decide to rest there. During the night it all goes downhill for the men. The giant grey bear comes home to the cave.. which the men were in. I was stunned when I heard about the watch-out found the bear. I thought the men would surely die.

I think the purpose of this chapter is to display that modern society does not have to deal with wild life attacks.. or the struggle to live.

One of the interesting events was when the cave men collected rocks before they went to sleep. I was baffled by the intelligence of the cavemen.. who are stereotyped as being stupid. I thought that the men were extremely clever to collect rocks for defense. This also interested me because in the modern day men wouldn't have to deal with giant bears attacking them.. or wild life in general attacking.

A key moment was when Naoh beat the grey bear to death! I was very surprised! I thought the men were condemned to death!. I was amazed that Naoh would have the courage to do this. If any wan were to be in their situation in 2012.. I'm sure that they'd just say there prayers and hope to live. Also even if they did kill the bear.. they would be deemed monsters by society.. and could be jail time. The sheer fact that a small man could bludgeon a giant grey bear who could "Strangle a horse" simply bewildered me!

In conclusion I thought that this was a great chapter to a seemingly good book. I would recommend it to anyone who likes action or adventure books.

Creative Writing For Prospector (Good Copy)

Before I start I would like to remind you that I don’t have a comma.. so I will be using “..” (Double full stops) instead.

Laying on the ground thinking “What can I do?” The answer does not arise. There is no solution. I guess you just can’t change what is meant to be.

The sun mocks me as it slowly awakes. On this island there are trees as white as the cigarette which is jammed between my chapped lips. I look around me.. surveying the beauty of Uzereck… the mountain I am on. Some may call it an Island. Some may call it fake. It’s real. Uzereck continues it’s never ending pilgrimage across the earth.. and forever will. Gazing across the land.. I wonder where to strike next.

I am looking for a precious jewel called Sittrium. Last time I checked.. scientists were offering thirty-billion for one kilogram of it. Only one small shard was found in all of humanity. It had fallen off of Uzereck. By the end of my journey I will have my thirty-billion.. and those scientists will have their pay too. Searching a forest-covered floating island is a lot harder than it sounds. There isn’t just the concept of being 200 feet in the air and could come spiraling down at any second to my doom.. there is also the oxygen to deal with. When I was born.. in 2006.. I always wanted to be a treasure hunter. I always wanted the name “Aksel Finley” to go down in history. 27 years later I still hold that dream close to my heart.. except now I have a grip on it. This could be my first success. I discard the stick of death I have been inhaling on for the past few minuets and hop down from the rock that I was perched on and start my search. Oxygen flows from the 3-centimeter large canister holstered on my thigh. The oxygen is compressed by five-thousand times.. I had the whole equivalent of three months air in this masterpiece. I’m on my last day.

After around 4 hours or so of hypnotic footsteps crunching against the frosted grass.. I stop. I have nearly reached my destination. The pulse of the Sittrium gets louder. As days go past on this island of wonder and deceit.. I start to question if this Sittrium is real. I start to question if anything is real. The air I breath.. the family I had. The pulse of the Sittrium is like the bang of a constant drum in my head. It’s blue pulse painted in my mind. I continue my journey. The throbbing of the Sittrium in my head gets louder.. as I further trek up the mountain of Uzereck. Reaching the top.. the beat of the Sittrium roars louder.. louder.. louder every second. I can’t bear it anymore. I tear open my satchel.. exposing the leather bag of which carries the monster. I pull the string attached.. unfolding the bag. The sinister shard of cyan flares at the recital of the pulse. I catapult the shard of Sittrium at the rocky mountain ground where I stand.. shattering it into a million pieces. The pulse ends. Relieved.. I fall to my knees. I slump into the most comfortable position I could find.. then relax. For once in 30 days.. the pulse stops. I watch the shrapnel of the Sittrium glimmer in the early morning sun. The familiar.. yet unwelcome.. pulse slowly returns.. this time quiet. The pulse is coming from inside my head. I put my head close to the Sittrium.. hoping for the noise to get stronger.. the opposite of what my hope is doing. No difference. Maybe the pulse was from my head. Maybe I’m going insane. Maybe I am insane. I look at the shattered chance of my dream called Sittrium.. and wonder if I’m insane.

Laying on the ground.. thinking “What can I do?” The answer does not arise. There is no solution. I guess you just can’t change what is meant to be.

My Favorite School Subject

My favorite school subject is German. The reason why that is, is because of the atmosphere. The teacher is very relaxed, and it is quite calm in general. We do not much work by ourselves, but we do lots of group work with the whole class. Seeing as there are 7 people in the class, there is quite alot of attention to every student. We all have a good time. It may sound like we don't learn much, but we do. The Teacher, Frau Campbell, is my year 8 teacher's daughter. I really hated Mrs. Campbell from year 8. She was so opressive. But I digress, another reason I love the subject German, is because I like to learn new languages. I feel cultured, I guess. Also, the people in the class are quite entertaining. My favorite memory of year 10 german would probably be making fun of "Alles Neu by Peter Fox" In the music video, he blows up his house, and kills monkeys. The monkeys turn out to be human. He then goes and preforms to a huge crowd, and the song is quite catchy in general.

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